Nasty weather’s heading this way and plans to stick around a while, so I’ll keep this brief. One thing I do like in a setting, especially anime but any setting, is attention to details. Two things that really show those off are… heh. Weather, and glasses.
Weather is, as any general would tell you, a critical factor in a fight. From heat so bad it gives your fighters heatstroke, to freezing blizzards that kill you mere feet from shelter, to rain that makes all the footing slippery. Mother Nature may not be deliberately out to kill you, but she doesn’t have anything against making it easier for someone or something else to do you in. I like works of fiction that pay attention to that.
And glasses. Hee. From the Scary Glasses Flash to subtle reflections of oncoming enemies to the near-inevitable “what happens if I lose my lenses in a fight?” Which, depending on the character, can range anywhere from “that’s inconvenient” to “I’m blind!” to “killer eyebeams now, duck….”
Details. Give me details – show me you’ve put thought into the setting, and the consequences of everything outside normal life – and my bunnies will follow you anywhere.
So when I’m editing, one thing I try to do is devote at least one run of edits to details. Are there enough to set the scene? Is there any way I can rewrite the details that are there to be clearer, more precise? What specific detail could I add that will make the reader feel they’re there?
Get those right, and who knows; maybe the readers will follow us anywhere, too….