Oddly enough, some of the most troublesome spots in the rough draft can be relatively short, text-wise.
I’m currently hacking at a bit of description from one of the minor characters’ POVs, near the final battle bits. It should be short, but it’s giving me a lot of trouble. Partly… eh, bug going around the area, concentration not what it should be. But partly because I want to be concise. Maybe I’m not that worried about exact words, those can be polished – but I’m trying to get in what details should be there, leave out what shouldn’t, and try to get the emotional tenor right.
Tricky, especially with a character whose head I haven’t spent that much time in.
Going to try hacking at it again, with various bribes for the bunnies.
Update: After some bunny-bribes and discussing an entirely different story with a fellow fic-writer, figured out part of the problem was the sequence in which some things were shown. My first idea had tension dropping in the middle. I have a revised idea that should more readily ratchet tension up, leading toward the Horrible Mess.
…Sometimes you get stuck because something is Not Right, and you just don’t know what. Yet.