NaNoWriMo: More Nemesis

I broke 50 K!

I still need to outline more, though, and writing actual prose is going to take even longer. Going to try and do as much of that as possible before the end of the month. But! NaNo accomplished!

…With that in mind, have a bit more villain. 😉

Well. He’ll just find ways to counter the counter, that’s all. Layer the control spells, different types, so that what breaks one won’t shatter another. It’ll work.

And for a time, it does. Maybe a week. Another village, another controlled monster, another quest he knows has been sent out to lure in more toys….

Two snaps this time. The white-out is longer. Long enough that by the time he’s recovered there’s a Giant Spider in his face, and for a few minutes he is very busy.

…This time the lair has salt water. Or possibly salt dissolved in water. He’s not sure. But the aura traces, while faint, are too familiar.

How the hell did she do that twice?

He may or may not have shredded a few trees in fury. Certainly a few mobs. But he was a rakshasa warrior, so once his bloodlust was sated, he straightened his kimono, took another form, and ventured into town to find one very annoying young Huntress. Checking the quest board should be a good start….

The quest board had been updated, sure enough. With a description that stopped him dead. “Possible shapeshifter”, “beasts under outside control”, and “aural traces imply high-level” were only part of the damning words. And what was this – this gall, to declare “watch out for the micro-smirk”? He was a skilled impersonator, the match of any kabuki player; he did not smirk!

(He does. Most people don’t see it. She saw it, and the jolt of adrenaline almost made her log out then and there. Almost.

(But then she got angry. Midnight’s supposed to be a game. An escape. Fun, in a world that keeps trying to kill her soul. And here’s more scummy, arrogant evil. No. Not when she could do something about it. She can’t in the real world, but here she has just as much power as any other new Hunter. And she was going to use it.)

Worse were the rumors flying through passing players, that some griefer was laying traps to kill innocent newbies….

As if any player were ever innocent. Especially this one. Certainly she could have detected the control magic on the monsters, if she were quick and quiet. But she could not have unmasked his presence in both villages without prior knowledge. There was no way. Some information broker had to die.

Three brokers, a lot of gold, and at least one oath of vengeance from a bereaved player later, Bakemono was forced to consider the option that maybe he hadn’t been betrayed after all. So how had she known?


23 thoughts on “NaNoWriMo: More Nemesis

  1. Yeah,

    With yesterday’s snippet, the models of how the two think made me, on reflection, very interested in seeing how this goes down.

    Updated the models some, still very interested.

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  2. I want to punch the Villain’s teeth out. That attitude and dickery is why I never go online in Dark Souls. No I don’t care if I’m missing good loot by not doing so. I don’t care that it would save a lot of time, I’m playing this for fun and stress relief alone.

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  3. Looking at the replies here? You know you’re Doin’ It Right with your villain when the readers are chanting, “Take the guy DOWN!”

    (Sympathetic villains can be good. Cathartic ones are so very satisfying, though…)

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      1. Me, too, I just fall short (as, by your writings, do you) of the “And so it’s ok to murdalize them.” level.

        I honestly spent an hour with my husband explaining I cannot stand to live with a creature that goes “I want to piss on your shoes to show you how much I love you” in the last month or two. Just can’t, no. So no Pug type dogs.

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      2. *Nod* This is something that seems to set me at odd angles to most people I’ve met. If I don’t like something or someone – really, really don’t like them – I just try to avoid them. I don’t plot evil things to do to them, I don’t try things to “get back” at them, I don’t spend hours agonizing over their existence. Just avoid.

        …It’s when someone is determined not to let me avoid that I start to get cranky.

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      3. I am not a dog fan.

        I do not work off of body language to the extent most humans do.

        Creatures like dogs or horses, where the body language and social structure are a large part of the psychological compatibility most experience?

        Large animals that I can’t reach no matter how hard I work on formulating the concepts, and I realize that. Possibly there are quite some number of humans that the same is true of, but permit me to retain my comforting illusions.

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  4. So this guy named himself ‘monster’? What a class act
    (And yes, I know that’s the least of what’s wrong with him, but it did seem like the cherry on top of the sundae of awful. Nice touch!)

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  5. Ahaha!

    Villain: I’m so clever, no one can figure out it’s me doing it!

    Hero: Watch out for situations that have thes traits in common. Gives list of accurate traits.

    Villain: WTF?!? How did they figure this all out without someone betraying me!

    This will be fun to watch.. both how the Hero figured out what was going on and how the Villain reacts to it.

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    1. I’ve seen that behavior before, making this doubly relatable (and darkly funny) for me. Reminds me particularly of a fellow over at GameFAQs, who became utterly convinced someone was tracking his IP address and sharing that info with other users. It apparently didn’t occur to him the fact that his new accounts always used an Adjective_Occupation formula for a user name, kept raving about the same games, and used the same–rather unusual–insults _might_ have been a clue to his identity.

      (Seriously. Running through a hundred–literally!–accounts in a month because he kept getting banned for saying the same stupid, abusive stuff? I don’t understand why people try things like that. It can be funny, but seriously, WTH?)

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